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“discussions between” isn’t strictly wrong, but when writing about discussions involving more than two parties, it’s common practice to use “discusions among” the parties — and using “discussions between” when writing about discussions involving just two parties. See the examples at https://textranch.com/667108/discussion-between/or/discussion-among/ There are exceptions of course — but looking through those examples will show that general practice is “between” for two-party discussions, and “among” for more-than-two-parties discussions.
…there’s no reason for “browser” to be uppercase here
Casually-abbreviated “JS” in “JS runtimes” isn’t strictly wrong, but “JavaScript runtimes” — written out — is better in this context (which is effectively a standalone mission statement) because it’s completely clear and unambiguous. Otherwise, since there’s nowhere else any explicit mention of JavaScript in the page, using just “JS” risks being less clear to some readers. And as a kind of mission statement, it’s better for the language here to be a bit more formal and less casual.
Given that the final sentence of this mission statement contains just 28 words, having the word “existing” occur in it 3 times seems like maybe a couple times too much…
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Each of the changes listed above is a separate commit here — so any of them that are undesired can just be rebased out.