10/10. The quality of writing, the production value, the indirect story telling,, it honestly left me flabbergasted that this was a game jam entry. Cannot wait to see what you do with this concept in the future.
An absolute fever dream of the VN...which kinda fits, coming from Unagi
tbh, although I do think that this VN showcases some cool effects/cinematic stuff, it kinda misses on the story front.
There's a lot of terminology front-loaded on the reader, and if you're not hyper-aware of the My Wolf VNs from the last game jam, it's a lot of "I think this is a reference but it's kinda incomprehensible to me"
In addition, there's a lot of jarring UI stuff that is mainly distracting and at the extreme, starts to make the computer run slower.
I liked the Alones tie in, and Wacky's sense of humor and art is always nice to see.
I think where it falls a little short, for me, and this is very much a personal thing, is that the plot is a little lacking in terms of providing a hook, and a lot of the development between the characters is skipped over.
I liked the Alones tie in, and Wacky's sense of humor and art is always nice to see.
I think where it falls a little short, for me, and this is very much a personal thing, is that the plot is a little lacking in terms of providing a hook, and a lot of the development between the characters is skipped over.
Lovely little murder mystery. Could have helped with some music or maybe a little more zippy presentation, but the story and humor this dev is known for carries the VN.
Wanted to report a bug. During the investigation segment of the outdoor area, you can try to leave during this bottom right exit, and the game will warn you, but unlike the other exits, it won't turn you around and spit you out...you just get stuck there and can't reach the menu.
Really liking this game so far...your character writing is really well done.
Only thing I would ask for after the demo is an options menu to adjust audio in the game and the text speed. I was having to tweak the audio a lot during the game so that it was comfortable, and the text speed was a little slow.
Before you Depart is a really good oneshot VN. Wasn't expecting much novel from the May Wolf contest, but ByD definitely wowed me.
I'm very familiar with Cetus' writing, and enjoyed seeing him writing for a very different character than Judah (ICO). The writing flowed well, the pacing of the scenes worked and didn't feel drug out.
I also really enjoyed the art style for this VN, Arcadia really hit it out of the park. I liked the expressionist CGs that felt right out of an Edvard Munch painting, and some of the cutouts felt very inspired by Revolutionary Girl Utena. Only thing that i felt could use a little tweaking is that Memento didn't quite mesh. Maybe that's purposeful given his character, but the design felt a little incoherent.
I also really liked the space waltz music, it was a nice use of original music to highlight a key moment.
All in all, would def reccomend you give this a look. Stories like this have been told before, but everything works together to deliver a vivid experience.
First time I played, it got right to when you meet Eva, and it crashed
Tried loading it again, and it got to the scene with the train, and IQRL_NOT_LESS_OR_EQUAL with a blue screen of death popped up, with the error occurring with nvlddmkm.sys . I have a pretty new computer, so i'm reluctant to mess with my drivers when I don't have this problem with literally any other game.
Actually, mastectomies were readily being explored as early as the 1800s (and even earlier, although this was before general anesthesia). In fact, the first surgery under anesthesia happened in 1804...and was a mastectomy. I have to question your dismissal of the narrative if you can't even google "history of mastectomies".
"Didn't get what was advertised on the box?" I don't remember you ever being promised anything other that this game contains +18 content.
My only guess is that he might mean he left some of his feathers around, in order to keep an eye on the area, in order to prevent more kids from reaching a similar end?
For Maelbjorn's couplet, to keep each line with ten syllables, here are two possible alternatives:
Once an heir, god-sentenced to perdition / The sword has become his chief ambition.
The gods sentenced this heir to perdition / So the sword became his chief ambition.
If you want to talk more about this, I'm Kopten#9136 over on Discord. Let me know if there's anything else localization-wise you'd want a second opinion on, I love this sort of thing.
Congrats Roddo, i think people are really going to like it. One idea for a CG for the Prologue could be Nerus and Shax in bed...either healthy or @s@i@c@k@
I really appreciate how well you took my critique from earlier...most people don't take criticism well, and I honestly believe that you have made a better product now. I appreciate that you still left Bat's anger towards Bear in there but allowed him to later regret how he talked towards him. It shows that relationships are tough and there's not always a wholey right and wholey wrong person in an argument.
Also, I really like the revamp of Bear's route. Feels a bit more weighty, and both of them get to be strong in it.
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